What is wrong with the tone of the following letter to a prospective employer?

	Question 5a of 10 ( 3 Tone 184195 )
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	Question Type:	Multiple Choice
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	Question:	What is wrong with the tone of the following letter to a prospective employer? To Whom It May Concern: I really want this job you are advertising in the paper. I’ve got the experience and the work ethic to make it at your company and if you just give me a chance to prove myself, I’ll make hiring me the best decision you have ever made. From, Glade Winters Choose the revision that is most likely to earn the job applicant an interview.

	Choice	Feedback
A.	To Whom It May Concern: I really want this job you are advertising in the paper. I have the experience and the work ethic to succeed at your company and if you just give me a chance to prove myself, I’ll make hiring me the best decision you have ever made. From, Glade Winters
B.	To Whom It May Concern: I look forward to interviewing for the job you are advertising in the paper. I’ve got the experience and the work ethic to make it at your company and if you are interested in reading my résumé, I will send it immediately. From, Glade Winters
*C.	Dear Mr. Jones: I am interested in the Dog Biscuit Bakery’s open counter position that I saw advertised in today’s Daily Herald. My past employment at Dog’s Haven and Dunkin’ Donuts includes relevant work experience that would be applicable to this position. Enclosed you will find my résumé. I look forward to meeting you and discussing my qualifications for the job. Sincerely, Glade Winters
D.	None of the above

Global Incorrect Feedback

The correct answer is:

Dear Mr. Jones:

I am interested in the Dog Biscuit Bakery’s open counter position that I saw advertised in today’s Daily Herald.

My past employment at Dog’s Haven and Dunkin’ Donuts includes relevant work experience that would be applicable to this position.

Enclosed you will find my résumé. I look forward to meeting you and discussing my qualifications for the job.

Sincerely,
Glade Winters

	Question 5c of 10 ( 3 Tone 299031 )
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	Question Type:	Multiple Choice
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	Question:	What is wrong with the tone of the following letter to a prospective employer? To Whom It May Concern: I totally need this job you advertised in the Sunday paper. I’ve got some experience, and I’ll work hard to make it at your company. I promise that I’ll prove myself. If you just give me a chance, you’ll never regret it. From, Thomas Centers Choose the revision that is most likely to earn the job applicant an interview.

	Choice	Feedback
*A.	Dear Dr. Smithers: I am very interested in the job you posted on the biomedical sciences bulletin board. Both my summer job with Dr. Winters and my internship with Dr. Townsend have afforded me quite a bit of experience working in the lab. Enclosed you will find my résumé. I look forward to meeting with you and discussing my qualifications for the position. Sincerely, Thomas Centers
B.	Dr. Smithers, If you want to see my résumé, I will send it immediately. I look forward to interviewing later this week. You can talk to Dr. Winters if you need any further information about me. Sincerely, Thomas Centers
C.	Dear Dr. Smithers: I really am interested in the job you posted. Here is my résumé. I can have Dr. Winters call you if you want more information about me. Just let me know. I look forward to interviewing with you. Sincerely, Thomas Centers
D.	None of the above

Global Incorrect Feedback

The correct answer is:

Dear Dr. Smithers:

I am very interested in the job you posted on the biomedical sciences bulletin board.

Both my summer job with Dr. Winters and my internship with Dr. Townsend have afforded me quite a bit of experience working in the lab.

Enclosed you will find my résumé. I look forward to meeting with you and discussing my qualifications for the position.

Sincerely,
Thomas Centers