Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph?

	Question 8a of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 182591 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? There was a monkey on a rocket ship. The rocket ship flew over the irrigation ditch. The monkey was eating papayas.

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A.	There was a monkey eating papayas on a rocket ship. The rocket ship flew over the irrigation ditch.
B.	There was a monkey on a rocket ship, which flew over the irrigation ditch. The monkey was eating papayas.
C.	There was a monkey on a rocket ship, which flew over the irrigation ditch and the monkey was eating papayas.
*D.	While eating papayas, the monkey flew over the irrigation ditch on a rocket.

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The correct answer is: While eating papayas, the monkey flew over the irrigation ditch on a rocket.

	Question 8b of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 293944 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? The giant iguana threatened the city. It belonged to Jim. It turned out that the iguana was misunderstood.

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*A.	Jim’s giant iguana threatened the city, but it turned out that the iguana was misunderstood.
B.	The giant iguana was Jim’s. It threatened the city. It was misunderstood.
C.	The giant iguana was Jim’s, and it threatened the city. It turned out that the iguana was misunderstood.
D.	None of the above

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The correct answer is: Jim’s giant iguana threatened the city, but it turned out that the iguana was misunderstood.

	Question 8c of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 293956 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? The tornado was huge. It left a path of destruction five miles wide. No one was injured. The damage was extensive.

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A.	The tornado was huge and left a path of destruction five miles wide. It did not injure anyone, but the damage was extensive.
B.	The huge tornado left a path of destruction five miles wide. While it injured no one, it caused extensive damage.
*C.	While the huge tornado did not injure anyone, it left a path of destruction five miles wide and caused extensive damage.
D.	None of the above

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The correct answer is: While the huge tornado did not injure anyone, it left a path of destruction five miles wide and caused extensive damage.

	Question 9a of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 182592 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? Manny chased his cousin out the door, around the fence, and into the mud pond. The mud was filled with bullfrogs.

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A.	Manny chased his cousin out the door, around the fence, and into the mud pond, a pond filled with bullfrogs.
*B.	Manny chased his cousin out the door, around the fence, and into a mud pond filled with bullfrogs.
C.	Manny chased his cousin out the door, around the fence, and into the mud pond and the mud was filled with bullfrogs.
D.	None of the above

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The correct answer is: Manny chased his cousin out the door, around the fence, and into a mud pond filled with bullfrogs.

	Question 9b of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 293945 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? Laura had had enough of Nelly’s arrogance and bragging. She pushed Nelly into the creek. She knew the creek was filled with leeches.

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*A.	Laura was tired of Nelly’s arrogant bragging, so she pushed Nelly into the creek, even though she knew it was full of leeches.
B.	Laura pushed Nelly into the leech-filled creek. This action was because Laura was sick of Nelly’s bragging.
C.	Although Laura knew the creek was full of leeches, she pushed Nelly in anyway. Laura was tired of Nelly’s arrogance and bragging.
D.	None of the above

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The correct answer is: Laura was tired of Nelly’s arrogant bragging, so she pushed Nelly into the creek, even though she knew it was full of leeches.

	Question 9c of 10 ( 3 Choppy Writing 293957 )
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	Question:	Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph? The thunder cracked. Lightning filled the sky. Still, the rain did not come. All the animals were wild with anxiety.

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A.	The thunder cracked and lightning filled the sky. Still, the rain did not come, but the animals were wild with anxiety.
B.	Because the rain did not come, the animals were wild with anxiety, and the thunder cracked. Lightning filled the sky.
*C.	Although the thunder cracked and lightning filled the sky, the rain still did not come, and the animals were wild with anxiety.
D.	None of the above

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The correct answer is: Although the thunder cracked and lightning filled the sky, the rain still did not come, and the animals were wild with anxiety.

Which is the most fluid revision of the following paragraph?

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